1）The young man attended the dinner party at last week. (×)
At 去掉。
2）The hostess asked the young man sit next to Mrs.Rumbold. (×)
Sit 前加to. Ask sb to do sth.
3）The lady was a large ,unsmiling lady in tight black dress. (×)
→In a tight black dress.　　少了a。
4）when the young man took his seat beside her ,she din not even look up,she look like svery indifferent. (×)
Din→did， look→looked, svery→very
5）May the lady was a foodie ,she always was busy eat . (×)
May→maybe, eat→eating. /Be busy doing 是想说：这位夫人也许是个吃货，她一直忙着吃，这个意思吗？
7）But no matter how young people talk to her (×)
Young people前加the， talk→talked
8）She always answers' NO' (×)
answers→answered. 时态不对，过去时态。
9）The young man indespair asked her whether she was enjoying her dinner(×)
Indespair→in despair . In despair,失望之余，放到句首。
10）'young man', she answered, 'if you eat more and talked less, we would both enjoy your dinner!' (×)
Eat→ate ，过去时态。 Your→our，有both，意思该是咱俩都会吃得更好的，因此是our dinner。
我选了23458，答案是2345，10 ... faint

the young man attened the dinner party last week .
the hostess asked the young man to sit next to Mrs.Rumbold .
The lady was a large ,unsmiling lady in a tight black dress .
When the young man took his seat beside her ,she did not even look up ,she looked like very indifferent.
May the lady was a foodie she always was busy with eating .
But no matter how the young people talked to her .
She always answered "no".
The young man was in despair and asked her whether she was enjoying her dinner ,
"Young man ."she answered "if you eat more and talk less ,we would both enjoy our dinner "

错误太多了。

对过去情况做出假设与过去的事实相反，在虚拟语气中应该用if从句的谓语形式用过去完成时，had+过去分词，主语用would/should/could/might+
have+过去分词.If he had know your address yesterday,he would have telephoned you.10)前后时态的一致性过去时态所以要用ate